Chapter 13, page 13

May 12th, 2017, 2:00 am

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Guesticus (Guest) May 12th, 2017, 5:55 am
"What things? Being an irritating bitch at times for a start!"

Heh heh, enjoying the first two panels, and Mirror being, well, Mirror :D
But considering what she has been through, can understand her suspicion (and her jealousy at seeing herself :P )
Guesticus (Guest) May 12th, 2017, 5:56 am
Of course she doesn't look anything like you, she's not lavender with aqua hair :P

It actually makes perfect sense that Tirin can see Lil Tir's memories as they form, and not the other way around: Tirin is the future self and what she learns is in the future, Lil Tir is in the past
Speedy (Guest) May 21st, 2019, 6:12 pm
@Guesticus: I just thought of something kinda sad. Mirror is probably comparing Abby to the girl they used to be, because she hasn't seen her own reflection since before she was trapped in the mirror.

She's a Mirror without a reflection. :'(
(maybe)
Lloyd (Guest) May 12th, 2017, 10:26 pm
Well, of course Abby has no magic ability. That was Mistress Salock's intent - to separate the magic from the non magic. The teleporting is mechanical.

Something just crossed my mind. Abby and Mirror each seem to be complete personalities with no obvious missing bits. It will be interesting to see the result when (I assume 'when,' not 'if') they merge back into one entity. For their sake I hope the result is a balance of both, not all one or all the other. (Although some authors are unapologetic about torturing their characters because it introduces tensions and helps to make a better story.)

As always, thank you for creating and sharing this story.
Guesticus (Guest) May 13th, 2017, 2:32 pm
@Lloyd: yeah, actually hoping they don't re-combine, or, if they do (probably will, unless the Author has thought of a way around that, personally have an idea or two, but it's His story) it's not, as you said, a complete domination of one over the other

Oh, an personally believe 'manufactured tension' does not make a 'better' story, it barely even qualifies as a 'good' or 'interesting' story, just look at all the 'reality' shows, from cooking to modelling to singing to flatmates living together
Merceneiress May 14th, 2017, 8:57 pm
@Guesticus: Yeah, I've got an idea of how Abby and Mirror's relationship will go, but the script is not set in stone. Sometimes an idea pops up that changes things. I've thought about "recombination" vs not vs other ways...we'll have to see...

@Lloyd: I have a blast creating and sharing Merceneiress with you and everyone else and an equal blast reading all of your comments. Keep 'em coming! Thanks so much for your kind words!!!
Guesticus (Guest) May 15th, 2017, 8:19 am
@Merceneiress: personally would like to see them remain separate (seeing how they do appear to have distinct personalities), but will wait and see what you have planned

Having a script that is not 'set in stone', POO, shows the mark of a great storywriter: they have an idea on how they want the story to go, but are not opposed to changing things as it unfolds, sometimes due to reader feedback but mostly simply because other ideas become better alternatives :D
Merceneiress May 17th, 2017, 8:41 pm
@Guesticus: Thanks, Guesticus. Great feedback like yours and everyone else's, has influenced the story quite a bit. Not gonna say how, but know that it has.
Guesticus (Guest) May 18th, 2017, 3:56 pm
@Merceneiress: not often comments from me have been referred to as 'great' :P
Speedy (Guest) May 21st, 2019, 5:52 pm
@Merceneiress: I hope it's a mix of the two, but with a Shoulder Abby and a Shoulder Mirror. xD

And, Shoulder Abby is always annoyed that Shoulder Mirror is naked, because she feels like everyone is always seeing her naked, too.
Speedy (Guest) May 21st, 2019, 6:02 pm
Fatal Last Words Billy: "I know! Abby, get naked, and I'll compare your girly bits with Mirror's!
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