Chapter 13, page 12

May 5th, 2017, 2:00 am

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Guesticus (Guest) May 5th, 2017, 6:23 am
Ooo, moment of truth: how far is Beau willing to go?
Why did Tirin leave it until now to tell her the full plan? Or is it simply, she felt Beau would have already figured that out by now?
But it makes sense: the only way to escape the Slorn, the self-imposed time-twisting bastards, is by putting a permanent end to the Slorn
Guesticus (Guest) May 5th, 2017, 6:25 am
You didn't change some of the script today because of comments on the last page, did you? o_O
Merceneiress May 5th, 2017, 8:59 am
@Guesticus: No, the script was not changed. This was the original dialogue. You ask the right question --- how far is Beau willing to go?
Dean (Guest) May 7th, 2017, 9:53 pm
'Also, this metal floor is REALLY uncomfortable to wrestle on.'
E Hines (Guest) May 8th, 2017, 6:03 am
@Dean: Looks like a factory's rubber mat to me. Or the Slorn are really bad decorators.
Eric Hines
Guesticus (Guest) May 8th, 2017, 12:12 pm
@E Hines: or, the metal equivalent, specially with that colour
Lloyd (Guest) May 9th, 2017, 8:21 am
Beau's expression in the last panel is awesome! The best one word descriptor I can find is 'enigmatic' but even so, it's not quite right.

I see her expression as she suddenly realizes that this secret thing she is involved in is much more complicated and has much more at stake than she previously thought.

Not many artists effectively portray an expression with so much behind it. Thank you.
Guesticus (Guest) May 9th, 2017, 7:30 pm
@Lloyd: agree with your sentiment: she's just realised that it's not just about her (and Tirin and a few others) escaping, but also putting an end to the whole thing to save everyone
Merceneiress May 10th, 2017, 1:04 am
@Lloyd: Thanks, Lloyd. I really appreciate your kind words! Like you said, sometimes the look on someone's face conveys an emotion or thought better than words. I am so glad you liked Beau's expression (exactly what I wanted to convey).

@Dean, @E Hines, @Guesticus: Yup the floor is metal and probably very cold (which suits the Slorn just fine, but probably gives goosebumps to the gals wrestling on it).
Guesticus (Guest) May 10th, 2017, 9:27 pm
Up until just a few minutes ago, had been reading Tirin's first line to be "... that she's not where she is supposed to be."
Merceneiress May 11th, 2017, 5:00 pm
@Guesticus: Hmm, based on your comment, I changed that first line a tiny bit. Hope it sounds better.
Guesticus (Guest) May 11th, 2017, 11:13 pm
@Merceneiress: didn't mean to imply there was anything wrong, just had been reading it differently
"She's not where she is supposed to be" and "she's where she is not supposed to be" mean different things
Aww heck, can't even remember how it was now to better explain, main point is: there wasn't anything wrong with what you had originally, it was just me reading it backwards (the meaning was still the same though, just in one it meant they knew she was there, but didn't realise she's not supposed to be, the other was she is supposed to be somewhere else and haven't detected her actual location)
It's complicated, and starting to confuse even me o_O
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